Globalisation originated since
ancient history. Government regulations
are however delayed in worldwide connections, resulting in harmful wars and
ruling of people. Globalisation increased
trade, causing environmental and health problems without governance. The increased trade also spread plague, causing
numerous deaths. Traders were threatened by pirates, taxes and religious
beliefs. Economically, monopolization and copyright infringements of goods
occur. Advancement of transportation and communications expanded trade routes,
but time management and space constraints posed as a problem. Most importantly,
globalization led to a global threat of nuclear weapons spreading amongst
countries. Massive industrialization deteriorated the environment. Even with
the Kyoto Protocol in place to reduce the impact, refusal of adherence and cooperation
by the US nullified the effects of the agreement. The US is gradually stepping
down from its responsibilities as a global leader, risking the globalised world
in facing its increasing challenges. All in all, globalization brings more harm
than good without proper governance
/Globalisation originated since ancient history. Delete this or rephrase it\ Government regulations are however delayed in(wrong word) worldwide connections, resulting in harmful wars and /ruling of people (?)\. Globalisation increased (Tense) trade, causing environmental and health problems without governance. The increased trade also spread(Tense) plague, causing numerous /deaths. Traders were threatened by pirates, taxes and religious beliefs. Economically, monopolization and copyright infringements of goods occur. Advancement of transportation and communications expanded trade routes, but time management and space constraints posed as(redundant) a problem. (How are these sentences linked?)\ Most importantly, globalization led(Tense) to a global threat of nuclear weapons spreading amongst /countries. Massive (Link) \industrialization deteriorated the environment. Even with the Kyoto Protocol in place to reduce the impact, (^)refusal of adherence and cooperation by the US nullified(Tense) the effects of the agreement. The US is gradually stepping down from its responsibilities as a global leader, /risking the globalised world in facing its increasing challenges (Rephrase)\. (LINK)All in all, globalization brings more harm than good without proper governance
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